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Hello Somebody-Actually!S.O.S: This looked fun, so I decided to make a character but I need help figuring out her history :S
She's going to be from the Lightning country, and I was thinking of maybe having her be apart of a nomadic clan (Sato, I think?) but I'm not sure exactly what that would entail.
Name: Dea Cho (pronounced DEE-UH)
Nickname: N/A
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth:14; November 14, 462
Age Appearance:Looks her age
Sexuality: Unexplored
Grandparents:
Sigfrid Cho [Maternal Grandfather: Alive]
Inge Cho [Maternal Grandmother: Alive]
Arne Cho [Paternal Grandfather: Alive]
Anna Cho [Paternal Grandmother: Deceased]
Parents:
Arne Cho [Father]
Frída Cho [Mother]
Siblings:
Magni Cho [Brother: Nine years older]
Length and build: 157 cm (5"2), slightly-built
Weight: 117lbs
Favorite weather and season: Rainy; Autumn
Nation: The Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Sea of Vanguri
Organization:
Cho Clan
Vanguri (Cynefrith)
Clan/Bloodline:Cho Clan, Vanguri
Rank: Genin
Chakra Nature: Earth release [She doesn't know it]
Appearance:
As pictured above Dea has tanned skinned, dark brown hair, and matching dark brown eyes. After a snip some years ago, her hair tries but ultimately fails to reach her shoulders. When dressing casually, she typically wears plainly adorned tunics or dresses.
Personality:
Because she was raised by loving family, and an equally familial community she, herself is also caring and friendly. Her early years were spent roaming around the Jarldom of Birgir, without many cares. Even when something comparable to a crisis did arise her parents were of the worry sort, to an almost concerning degree at times, thus she could help but develop a similar, if less intense, carefreeness.
She has, however, become more reserved due to the latest developments. Being brought far north from the place and region she used to call home, to people that she doesn't know. Into a large urban area, is a scary transaction. Not even being able to speak the Taika language, at the start, made it all the more confusing for her.
Dea is very conscientious and diligent. That is, partly, because she was raised that way. But also because she wants to make sure that she doesn't disappoint her parents, who're now too far away to catch her when she falls. What's more she would like to not cause trouble to the family that graciously fostered and treated her well these past few years.
Now with being part of the military and growing into it, she hopes that she can do her part to keep her people and family safe from harm.
History:
Dea was born in the southern parts of the current Akenian Empire, fourteen years ago. She would be born to two loving parents, that were part of a Vanguri clan. The Vanguri are a semi-nomadic people that live within the Cho jarldom of Birgir. The early years of Dea's life weren't that much different from an average Vanguri. She was taught about her people's history, that of the Cho clan itself and about some of the country. As she would grow up, Dea would be taught other practical matters of the Vanguri. Such as, learning how to take care of and ride horses.
Then, when Dea reached the age of eleven, there was an accident. While taking care of some horses, the animals got spooked. A 'spark' of chakra seemed to be the cause. This incident gave a scare to both Dea and her family. Despite the initial dread, it became clear that Dea would require mentoring in how to control her newly surfaced talent, lest even more dangerous accidents occur. Though there were capable ways to help her, the best solution seemed to be for her to sign up in the military. For it would be the cheapest and most efficient route. At the same time, this would mean that Dea would be seperated from the people she called family and friends.
Inevitably, Dea traveled towards Konohagakure, where she would enlist into the Imperial military. This journey was undertaken with her father and some of her kinsmen. While not a dangerous one, it would slowly dawn onto the child that she would soon be separated from everybody she loved.
Once at Konohagakure, her father arranged a place for Dea to stay at the Cho compound. He arranged a deal with a family, an older and seemingly childless couple, to basically become a foster family for Dea. It was stressful for the young girl, but she would soon after become distracted with going to the Shinobi Academy. Progress was slow for her, due to the new surroundings, culture, and people that were just completely new for Dea. But with her upbeat but respectful personality, Dea managed to overcome some of those obstacles. Even starting to excel in the basics taught at the Academy. Her foster family was very helpful at this time, accepting her fully into their family and helping her to understand how urban life worked. The community within the Cho compound would also provide an environment for Dea to flourish in. From the enigmatic Cho Guard to the friendly neighbours, Dea would slowly but surely not feel as much of a stranger.
Contact with her family and Vanguri kin was sparse, though. The large distance and semi-nomadic lifestyle made it hard to have contact on a regular basis. Despite that, Dea would,l continue to strive to succeed in graduating and learning how to become more adept with her chakra. Dea graduated from the Academy at the age of fourteen. Shortly afterwards, Dea would become assigned to a team. One that would go by the number 4.
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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: General Shinobi Gear
Description: Kunai, shuriken, tags and some smoke bombs. The general equipment of a shinobi operating in the field.
Skills/Abilities
-Capable handler and rider of horses
-Knows and speaks Chonobi fluently
-Decent knowledge of Taika, speaks with heavy Chonobi accent
- Possesses good stamina for a genin
-Novice Silent Killing
-Decent chakra control
Special Traits
-Average chakra reserves
-She's loyal to both her clan, and those who've earned her trust.
-She has trouble learning new ninjutsu
Jutsu
Mastered the Academy Jutsu.
D-ranked Techniques:
Manipulated Shuriken Wire Binding
Manipulated Shuriken Technique
Enclosing Technique
Unsealing Technique
Shadow Senbon
Second acceptance right here! Go and post her into the accepted character thread. Right here! Click that link and slam dunk that CS right there!
Name: Dea Cho (pronounced DEE-UH)
Nickname: N/A
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth:14; November 14, 462
Age Appearance:Looks her age
Sexuality: Unexplored
Grandparents:
Sigfrid Cho [Maternal Grandfather: Alive]
Inge Cho [Maternal Grandmother: Alive]
Arne Cho [Paternal Grandfather: Alive]
Anna Cho [Paternal Grandmother: Deceased]
Parents:
Arne Cho [Father]
Frída Cho [Mother]
Siblings:
Magni Cho [Brother: Nine years older]
Length and build: 157 cm (5"2), slightly-built
Weight: 117lbs
Favorite weather and season: Rainy; Autumn
Nation: The Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Sea of Vanguri
Organization:
Cho Clan
Vanguri (Cynefrith)
Clan/Bloodline:Cho Clan, Vanguri
Rank: Genin
Chakra Nature: Earth release [She doesn't know it]
Appearance:
As pictured above Dea has tanned skinned, dark brown hair, and matching dark brown eyes. After a snip some years ago, her hair tries but ultimately fails to reach her shoulders. When dressing casually, she typically wears plainly adorned tunics or dresses.
Personality:
Because she was raised by loving family, and an equally familial community she, herself is also caring and friendly. Her early years were spent roaming around the Jarldom of Birgir, without many cares. Even when something comparable to a crisis did arise her parents were of the worry sort, to an almost concerning degree at times, thus she could help but develop a similar, if less intense, carefreeness.
She has, however, become more reserved due to the latest developments. Being brought far north from the place and region she used to call home, to people that she doesn't know. Into a large urban area, is a scary transaction. Not even being able to speak the Taika language, at the start, made it all the more confusing for her.
Dea is very conscientious and diligent. That is, partly, because she was raised that way. But also because she wants to make sure that she doesn't disappoint her parents, who're now too far away to catch her when she falls. What's more she would like to not cause trouble to the family that graciously fostered and treated her well these past few years.
Now with being part of the military and growing into it, she hopes that she can do her part to keep her people and family safe from harm.
History:
Dea was born in the southern parts of the current Akenian Empire, fourteen years ago. She would be born to two loving parents, that were part of a Vanguri clan. The Vanguri are a semi-nomadic people that live within the Cho jarldom of Birgir. The early years of Dea's life weren't that much different from an average Vanguri. She was taught about her people's history, that of the Cho clan itself and about some of the country. As she would grow up, Dea would be taught other practical matters of the Vanguri. Such as, learning how to take care of and ride horses.
Then, when Dea reached the age of eleven, there was an accident. While taking care of some horses, the animals got spooked. A 'spark' of chakra seemed to be the cause. This incident gave a scare to both Dea and her family. Despite the initial dread, it became clear that Dea would require mentoring in how to control her newly surfaced talent, lest even more dangerous accidents occur. Though there were capable ways to help her, the best solution seemed to be for her to sign up in the military. For it would be the cheapest and most efficient route. At the same time, this would mean that Dea would be seperated from the people she called family and friends.
Inevitably, Dea traveled towards Konohagakure, where she would enlist into the Imperial military. This journey was undertaken with her father and some of her kinsmen. While not a dangerous one, it would slowly dawn onto the child that she would soon be separated from everybody she loved.
Once at Konohagakure, her father arranged a place for Dea to stay at the Cho compound. He arranged a deal with a family, an older and seemingly childless couple, to basically become a foster family for Dea. It was stressful for the young girl, but she would soon after become distracted with going to the Shinobi Academy. Progress was slow for her, due to the new surroundings, culture, and people that were just completely new for Dea. But with her upbeat but respectful personality, Dea managed to overcome some of those obstacles. Even starting to excel in the basics taught at the Academy. Her foster family was very helpful at this time, accepting her fully into their family and helping her to understand how urban life worked. The community within the Cho compound would also provide an environment for Dea to flourish in. From the enigmatic Cho Guard to the friendly neighbours, Dea would slowly but surely not feel as much of a stranger.
Contact with her family and Vanguri kin was sparse, though. The large distance and semi-nomadic lifestyle made it hard to have contact on a regular basis. Despite that, Dea would,l continue to strive to succeed in graduating and learning how to become more adept with her chakra. Dea graduated from the Academy at the age of fourteen. Shortly afterwards, Dea would become assigned to a team. One that would go by the number 4.
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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: General Shinobi Gear
Description: Kunai, shuriken, tags and some smoke bombs. The general equipment of a shinobi operating in the field.
Skills/Abilities
-Capable handler and rider of horses
-Knows and speaks Chonobi fluently
-Decent knowledge of Taika, speaks with heavy Chonobi accent
- Possesses good stamina for a genin
-Novice Silent Killing
-Decent chakra control
Special Traits
-Average chakra reserves
-She's loyal to both her clan, and those who've earned her trust.
-She has trouble learning new ninjutsu
Jutsu
Mastered the Academy Jutsu.
D-ranked Techniques:
Manipulated Shuriken Wire Binding
Manipulated Shuriken Technique
Enclosing Technique
Unsealing Technique
Shadow Senbon
I would add 'Imperial Akenian military'.Organization: Hyuzu Clan
Which one of them is his affinity?-Fire
-Water
(At least two decent paragraphs), is being required for any character sheet. I reckon with his age that he has been through some stuff. So rack it up, Conny.History:
Somewhat too large in my opinion. Not because it is a dragon but because of the various abilities it posses. Giving it a larger size is making it hard for me to see any balancing done to it.Size: Large (The size of an elephant)
Before I head to bed, I will check it.@Aliceee All issues have been addressed.
Approved by me as well.
"I am a loyal servant of the realm."
Name: Orun Hyuzu
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 27, born in February.
Age Appearance: 24
Sexuality: Straight
Grandparents: Deceased
Parents: Deceased
Siblings: None
Length and build: 5'11, Athletic build
Weight: 200 lbs
Nation: Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Hyuzu Clan Compound
Organization: Hyuzu Clan, Imperial Akenian Military
Clan/Bloodline: Hyuzu Clan
Rank: Specialized Jounin
Chakra Nature:
-Fire (Affinity)
-Water(Secondary, Trained Chakra nature)
Appearance:
Personality: A dedicated, loyal, and hard working shinobi, Orun has forged many friendships in his lifetime. Prone to both making friends and drinking when the occasion arises, Orun is headstrong, and his determination is a force to be reckoned with, having driven him to the rank of Jounin. To his friends, he is loyal to the core, to his enemies, he is an unrelenting hunter. Once given a task, he will not quit until it is completed.
History:
A warrior, and shinobi of the Hyuzu clan, Orun has spent much of his life living in or near Konagakure. As a child, he grew up with two loving parents, who held him dearly. He was surrounded by loving and supporting family. When he ten years old, Orun chose to enter the academy. He graduated several years later. When he was thirteen, Orun underwent the trial of the dragon, gaining through it a bond with his dragon Tireo. The pair would initially rub each other the wrong way, as each vied for dominance in their relationship. However, when at fifteen his parents and grandparents were taken by disease, the pair became fast friends, Tireo comforting the teenager over the loss of those who were closest to him. Orun seemed to take the loss badly, despite the comfort that Tireo offered, and he took a leave of absence. He left for two years, flying around the countryside and trying to find new direction before he returned.
When he did return, even to his closest friends it was evident that Orun had changed. The usually cheery young man seemed to be hiding his true feelings behind a cheery facade. He was less open and more distant to the friends he returned to. This was reflected when, instead of living at the home that his family had inhabited inside the Hyuzu clan compound, he chose to instead live outside of it. Something else seemed to drive Hyuzu now, he was hard working to a point, brutally efficient, and good at what he did. It was during this time that he forged his sword, Fireheart, opting to make it black like the scales of his dragon. Additionally, he forged a matching set of armor to go with it, though this was stored away. The blade would serve him through countless battles.
So the changed Orun continued to serve in the shinobi corp, living in town away from the other Hyuzu, as if to escape the memories of those there. He adapted well, his work remained unaffected, and indeed even improved in most, if not all places. A new ambition burned in his heart. He wanted to become a renowned ninja, becoming a jounin and leading a squad of his own. This new drive pushed him to become a chuunin. Working together with Tireo, Orun passed the chuunin exams with flying colors.
Orun would spend quite a long time as a chuunin, learning all he could, as well as mastering his second chakra nature. It would be during this long interval that he would study and learn many jutsu, a preparation that would ensure a promotion to jounin. When he did get a promotion to jounin, rather then stay with his squad, he was assigned to team 8, to learn from the current sensei of the team, studying under them. A dedicated and hard-worker, Orun plans to forge his own path with this new squad he was assigned to.
Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Fireheart
Description: A hand and a half sword with a cross guard in the likeness of a large branching flame. The hilt is a likeness of Orun's dragon, Tireo, and the sword blade is colored the same shining ebony that the scales of his dragon reflect.
Skills/Abilities
-High reflexes, speed, stamina, and durability.
-Good taijutsu and swordsmanship
-Average Chakra control
Special Traits
-High Chakra Levels
-A black swirling flame symbol appears on his right palm when he summons Tireo
Jutsu
Fire Jutsu (Secondary chakra nature)
Rank B:
Ash Pile Burning
Rank C:
Phoenix Flower Jutsu
Dragon Fire Technique
Greatfireball Technique
Fire Dragon Bullet
Flame Bullet
Water Jutsu (Primary Chakra Nature)
Rank C:
Water Release: Water Prison
Water Release: Gunshot
Waterfall Basin Technique
Rank B:
Water Dragon Bullet Technique
Water Formation Wall
Water Fang Bullet
Rank A:
Great Waterfall Technique
Summons
Name: Tireo
Species: Dragon
Age: 32
Image:
Size: Large (The size of a horse)
Unique Traits:Can fly, breathe fire, and communicate telepathically and through voice. Can carry one passenger only while flying.
Jutsu: None
History: Tireo is a black dragon who was contracted with Orun during the trial of the Dragon. Originally, the pair struggled with each other for dominance, and eventually, despite the nature of their relationship, the pair have become friends. Tireo is at Orun's side whenever he can afford to be, and being intelligent as he is, that is often enough. The dragon has grown up alongside Orun in many ways. He has seen him through many things, including the Chuunin exams, countless missions alongside his previous squad, and the various tribulations that saw him promoted to Jounin. This has forged a bond that cannot be broken between the pair.
"I don't want to hurt you, but I will if I must."
Name: Saito ,Shiori
Nickname:
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth: Sixteen - December 22nd, 460
Age Appearance: Late Teens/Early Twenties
Sexuality: Straight
Grandparents:
Never met her grandparents. The ones from her father's side perished during The Great War and those from her Mother's side shunned Osami after she got married with Kojiro, then died years later.
Parents:
Saito, Kojiro - Father (45)
Saito, Osami - Mother (41)
Siblings:
Saito, Yosuke - Brother (12)
Saito ,Shiro - Sister (22)
Length and build: 5'8
Weight: 132
Favorite weather and season: Snow or Rain/Fall and Winter
Nation: Republic of The Water Country
Birthplace: Kosa
Organization: N/A
Clan/Bloodline: None
Rank: Genin
Chakra Nature: Water
Appearance:
Shiori has pallid skin, void of most color. Whenever she spends too much time under the sun her skin takes on a red texture, and begins to rash up in the form of a pretty bad sunburn. Her hair is just as void of color as her skin tone. Her eyes are heterochromatic, adding to her prominent features. But her most distinct feature is the strange markings on her left cheek. She was born with three lines that lead from the side of her face down to upper half of her neck and it's still unexplained by doctors how they even got there.
Personality: Shiori is always happy and known by her family as a free spirit. She's never seen at home as she's often running around town with all her friends (who sadly aren't chakra users) or checking out the sights from the highest buildings in Kiri. But this behavior and childish attitude lead to negative grades for most of her time in the academy. She was known as somewhat of the class clown, and got along with just about anyone. Luckily for her, her taijutsu, high levels of chakra, and awareness in the battlefield would help her get through the academy with ease. But Shiori still has a long way to go, as she struggles controlling her abnormal levels of chakra.
Despite her kindness, Shirori can truly be the coldest towards her enemies. Those that prove to be disloyal towards her, or towards the things she stands for receive a different side of Shiori. One that her parents have only witnessed a number of times when she was a toddler and would end up getting angry towards other kids. She would become vicious (and surprisingly strong for her age). This form of aggression, harshness, and anger still haunts her but much less than when she was a child as it takes a lot to get on her bad side.
History:
Shiori, Daughter of Kojiro and Osami, was born and raised in Kosa. A small little city she knew as home for most of her young life. Her father was a former Ninja of Konoha, and he met Osami when he first visited Kirigakure many years ago during an escort mission. Kojiro said it was love at first sight but Shiori sensed the humor behind the statement through the annoyed look her mother would always give him. From that moment on they would exchange love letters, that Osami's parents would eventually find out about. They grew outraged and ordered her to abandon these petty love letters at once. Osami, being the daughter of a high class family of Kiri, reluctantly decided to abstain from speaking to Kojiro ever again. Having the daughter of a wealthy family of Kirigakure, speaking to some lowsome soldier of Konoha? Might as well deem it as treason and execute her in front of the townsfolk.
It went according to plan for Osami's family, as they found no more love letters for a good five months that followed. The boy from Konoha must've gotten the hint when there was no reply and decided to move on. Or at least that's what they thought happened before he would suddenly appear at their front door. They were met with shock and anger, downright ordering him away from their home before they had him arrested. But before he was able to leave, Osami would burst past them, bags huddled over her shoulders to meet Kojiro with a loving caress. They ordered Osami back into the house, but she refused, and they cursed her name stating that she may never return. The day she would return, her child would bear the curse of their hatred for Konoha.
So Osami left her home in Kirigakure, and returned with Kojiro back to Konoha. She loved it there. It was quite the different atmosphere. Everything was so beautiful and lively, there was an abundance of trees, thick woods, a lot of wildlife. The people there weren't as menacing as in Kiri either. Everything was perfect. Even Kojiro's parents accepted Osami for who she was. There, they had their first daughter. Saito, Shiro was born in 454, in Konohagakure. Not as a citizen though, as her mother was a foreigner. Osami abandoned her last name, that she refuses to ever utter, and took on the Saito name three years before the Great War began.
When the Great War erupted, Kojiro lost both of his parent who were venturing out of town and although it hurt Kojiro immensely he knew he would have to get as far away from Konoha as possible. It was never clear to Osami as to why Kojiro forced them to pack their things and leave, and she had her own theories as to why, one of them being he was a part of something sinister that would be seen as treason. The reports say his parents died due to the hands of an enemy, but Kojiro refused to believe that and he felt as though they were in danger. So together, a pregnant Osami, a six year old Shiro (who was scared and unaware in all of her innocence of what was going on) and Kojiro escaped back to Kosa.
There they had their second Daughter, Shori and Osami's heart dropped. She would stay up at night, crying stating over and over how her daughter is forced to carry the curse of her family. Kojiro believed in no such thing, and assured her that her family was made up of lunatics, and the markings must be normal. Little did they know just how wrong they were.
They were safe there for a few years until they felt the Fire Countries forces inching ever closer to their borders. It was a scary sight as Kojiro attempted to prepare his family for the very worse. But before anything could happen the war had ended. Things were safe for them. No one knew of Kojiro's background, and through some acquaintances he was able to obtain fake citizenships for himself, Shiro and Shiori. Things were looking up. Of course though, Kosa itself still needed time to mend their wounds. When Shiori was four, her younger brother was born.
Life in Kosa was exciting for little Shiori. When she first started in the school for younger children, she had trouble controlling her anger towards the boys that would often tease her by taking her books from her. That's how her teachers discovered her to be a chakra user. She was also pretty strong for her age as it would take about two grown teachers just to stop this seven year old girl from physically harming a boy over a book.
After this the teachers would suggest to her parents that they put her in an Academy, as she would be fit for that. So they began setting out her application many years ahead of time. She was accepted into many different Academies from different villages in the Water Country, including the one in Kirigakure the most prestigious one of them all. Shiori was excited to go and often teased her siblings, even Shiro who she often looked up, about how she would get to fight against some of the best young talents in all the land. Shiro didn't care, but six year old Yosuke grew jealous. Osami on the other hand was unsure if they should send her out that far. She didn't want her daughter to be there all alone, and neither did Kojiro but Kosa grew on both of them and eventually became home.
Two years later, when Shiro was twelve, they were ordered by the academy in Kirigakure (the school they ended up responding to on Shiro's acceptance) to give her a physical examination in preparation. When they were there the doctor tested her and when the results came back he confirmed that he was unable to find anything concerning the markings on her left cheek, but he did state that she had a high level of chakra for her age and she seemed relatively fit to be put into an academy.
Her family was thrilled, as was she. She went out to Kirigakure, staying with a family friend (someone Osami grew up with named Luna) as she completed her time in the academy within four years. She came back to Kosa to visit her family within a little debriefing period, she had some free time to see them before having to go back to meet her sensei and teammates as a new Genin of Kirigakure and the Republic. Her family, who hasn't seen her in four years was only able to send messages back and forth. Since then, Shiro went back to Konohagakure in order to pursuit her own dreams and goals of seeing her original birthplace. She wants to run some type of business there. Twelve year old Yosuke was also put into an Academy, but was only accepted to the one in Kosa as his potential is minimal compared to that of his sister's. Her parents warn her to be careful, since they last saw her she's grown into a woman and her body has developed tremendously, they wouldn't want her to get taken advantage of. But she constantly reminds them now that she isn't a little girl anymore, she's a Ninja now.
Finally, she bid them farewell as she sailed back to Kirigakure, to begin her duties as a Genin. What awaits her and what exactly stands behind this immense power she potentially possesses exactly? Only time will tell.
Theme Song:
Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Kunai
Description: A common tool used by most Shinobi. She has a number of different types. Two normal ones, two with explosive seals tied to them, and one with a poison tip.
Appearance:
Skills/Abilities
-Lack of Chakra Control
- Fast and Nimble
- Good Reflexes
- Advanced in Taijutsu
Special Traits
-High Chakra Levels
-Becomes Stronger as life is at risk
-Cursed Mark
Kekkei Genkai
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Name of Kekkei Genkai: The Cursed Mark
Clan : Unknown (Osami Refuses to Utter her family name)
Description: Still unknown by Shiori as she holds no control over it. As of now it only activates whenever her life is put at risk. Her chakra levels rise rapidly and the flood gates holding the chakra back bursts open. The white around her hues turn black as her eye changes color, glowing bright white. It's rumored that this eye can help her see chakra levels around her enemy, but she can never explain it because by the time she passes out and wakes up she remembers nothing. The problem with this kekkei genkai is that it drains energy from her being at such a rapid rate that within minutes she will succumb to the energy levels.
Jutsu
Water Style: Raging Waves
Water Style: Water Clone Jutsu
(She can only currently perform these two Jutsus with her lack of Chakra Control)
Only to later on state:Shiori, Daughter of Kojiro and Osami, was born and raised in Kosa.
So my question is, was she born in Konohagakure or Kosa? Just a simple continuity error it seems, maybe changed your mind part way through the history and forgot to change one or the other so no big issue as long as you fix it.Shiori went back to Konohagakure in order to pursuit her dreams and goals of seeing her original birthplace.
There is a limit of two "Good" abilities for a Genin level character. So an easy fix, just move "Advanced" on down to "Good" to meet the limit. As well I'd like to have you add in a Strength value for Shiori, given her history of needing two teachers to hold her back as a toddler I'd like to see what you consider her strength to be now.Advanced in Taijutsu
Is this a direct result of the Curse Mark? It appears so but I'd like your word to be sure.Becomes Stronger as life is at risk